Wednesday, May 9, 2012

Flash Fiction Trust Me

Trust Me

“Are you sure it’s okay?”

“Yeah,” he said, looking for a location, to pull off the road. The gravel crunched under the car as they eased along the country road. He parked the car, and the engine sputtered then fell silent.

“Sure no one can see us?” She shifted nervously looking out the window.

“I’m sure,” glancing up at the moon he smiles, “unless a werewolf shows up, I think you’ll be fine.”

He smiled and kissed her lips before she could protest again. She melted against the pressure of his tight embrace. Her eyes grew wide when she felt the sharp prick against her neck.

She pulled away, “You said I’d be safe.”

“I’m not a werewolf.” He shrugged as blood dripped from his smiling lips. 

29 comments:

  1. o_0 Sneaky vampy!
    Good sense of setting and great dialogue.
    Nicely done.

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  2. Great story. Loved the twist although did see it coming.

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    1. LOL, a little campy but fun. thanks

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    2. Graham loved your website, thanks for stopping by mine!

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  3. You see, that's vamps for you. Totally untrustworthy, always said that. Nice one.

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  4. That darned vampire! bad boy. I liked this a lot. Nice blend of tension and twist.

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    1. Thanks Jeffrey, but you know boys will be boys even vamps. LOL

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  5. Sure would be nice if a werewolf did show up to teach him a lesson. Trick old undead. Nicely written scene!

    Wakefield
    http://www.wakefieldmahon.com/1/post/2012/05/the-good-old-days-friday-fictioneers.html

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    1. Thanks Wakefield, :-) I should've put a howl in there.

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  6. I shoudl have seen it coming. I had a rude shock at the twist. A very fine piece and flow. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/fridayfictioneers-tanoas-baby/

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    1. Thank you I couldn't ask for a better compliment!

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  7. I didn't see the twist coming, but I'll use a long day as my excuse! ;-)
    Good job on this. :-)

    Ours is here: http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/moon-and-sky

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  8. Dear Jean,

    Will those young girls ever learn? Even with the spate of vampire sightings over the past few years, there seems to be no shortage of new victims willing to bare their necks to the blood suckers.

    Nice work here. Poor girl.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/last-of-the-first/

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  9. Quite a cute little tale you have here. I thought there would be a lot of werewolf and vampire tales this week, but yours is one of the few. So good on you!
    Lindaura
    And this is mine:
    http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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  10. You handled this nicely.
    Here's mine: http://wp.me/p1Tjpv-aJ

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  11. Nice little tale here. Never expected the twist at the end. Good job!

    My attempt: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/death-cart/

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  12. haha. Just like a man. Don't worry about everything else, I'll protect you (but who's going to protect her from him?). Love how this went!

    My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/she-called-to-him/

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    1. So true hence the name. LOL Glad you like it.

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  13. A great story.
    Just when she thought she was safe from the werewolves a vampire turns up. Life can be hard at times!

    http://mjshorts.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/tomorrow-a-100-word-story/

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    1. That it can! LOL Thanks for the compliment!

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  14. Ah, necking. Seems you can't trust anybody.

    Here's mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/flash-fiction-friday-3/

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    1. Yea! You are the first person to pick up on "necking" as a boomer... well never mind. :-) Thanks for stopping by. Hopping to yours.

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