Thursday, May 3, 2012

100-word Flash Fiction: Hide-N-Seek


Hide-N-Seek
The young boy ran down the winding path. Laughter and pounding feet gave chase as he moved swiftly climbing the rickety steps.


The old Jackson place had been abandoned for years. Voices echoed against the collapsed walls as they called out; he feared that today all might be revealed. He moved instantly to the room with flowers, and then faded behind the crumbling paper.

The boys joked and teased as they entered the old house. From his hiding place, he watched the games; it’d been a long time since anyone had asked him to play. Tonight maybe he’d play anyway.


Photo Prompt for 100-word Flash #FridayFictioneers

11 comments:

  1. A ghostly apparition engaging in play? Nicely done. Reminds me of "Casper". delightful!

    Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

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  2. Hmmmm Serial Killer in developmental stages?
    Nicely done! Here's mine http://createrealitylivelife.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/friday-flash-fiction/

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  3. Dear Jeanelaine,

    I like the slow shift form one world to the next. I hope he plays this time. Sad and strangely compelling story.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/the-nerve/

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  4. Ah...'tonight, he may play, anyway'...I hope it means he may reveal himself to these bratty kids and spook the bejeezees out of them. Let the fun begin. LoL. Love it.
    Here's mine:
    www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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    1. Thanks for the smile, glad you enjoyed it.

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  5. It was confusing at first, making me want to go back and reread before I was done. But the 'Casper' interpretation certainly makes sense, and I probably agree with it.

    But there's nothing saying the boy HAS to be a ghost. I don't understand the flowers, but there could just be some background I don't know (yet, assuming this piece was ever extended). Mostly, though, I just assumed the kid was shy, if playful.

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    1. Oh, right.

      http://littlewonder2.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/friday-fictioneers-suicide-shed/

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    2. Glad you finally "got" it. The flowers were on the wall paper.

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