Monday, April 30, 2012

100 Word Challenge-Working Girl

100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups – Week #40
My contribution: Working Girl

Exhilaration made her eyes sparkle, stopping at the mirror near the door brushing her bottle blonde hair one more time and dabbing the smudge of mascara. Satisfied she smiled no need for more makeup. One look at those cupid bow lips and her mother knew the perfect name for her baby girl.

She picked up the cash and turned at the sound of her name.

“Ruby,” he called again. “Same time next week?”

She smiled, with lips the color of crimson, blew a kiss to the man behind her, and walked out the door. 


Official Ruby logo
Official Ruby logo (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

28 comments:

  1. Ruby has so much potential for development of a character. Hope to hear more about her some time.

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    1. Thanks Sally-Jayne, I hadn't thought about her that way, you've given me an idea. She will now go in my character file!

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  2. An interesting piece that makes the reader want to know just what was going on... enjoyed this :)

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    1. Thanks so much Anna, a writer couldn't ask for more.

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  3. Gr8! You think she's getting ready to go out but, no, even better ... my only suggestion would be to change the title so that we don't know she's er, 'working'. Don't give the game away too early.

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    1. Thanks, I did think about that, but that too is subjective. LOL

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  4. Nice one. I think Ventahl's right about the title. Well done.

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    1. Thanks Sandra, glad you enjoyed it.

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  5. good post! already love the character :) x

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    1. Thanks, I loved her the minute she popped in my mind.

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  6. Really enjoyed her self assured brassy character. Or is she? Great entry.

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    1. In this piece yes, thanks glad you enjoyed her.

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  8. Lucky girl to love her job so much - not everyone can say that they do :).

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  9. We were on the same brain wave .... I like your take on it.
    Well written. So intriguing and powerful on her part.
    Well done ...!!!
    Hope you stop by and read my entry ...
    http://insidethemindofisadora.wordpress.com/2012/05/02/ruby/
    Thanks,
    Isadora

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  10. DancingInTheRainMay 3, 2012 at 12:33 AM

    Well done - and so realistically written - but once I got to the end I was surprised that she was exhilarated at the beginning.

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    1. Never know what's in the mind of a woman!, Glad you enjoyed it.

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  11. There's a hint - the smudge of mascara. But I didn't get it. Well done!

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  12. "Oh Ru-u-by, don't take your love to town." Now I can really imagine the 'Ruby' from the song - nice characterisation.

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    1. Thanks so much! The minute I read Ruby was the word for the challenge, Kenny Rogers popped in my head. I had to go with it. Sometimes a girls gotta do what a girls gotta do. LOL

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    2. Definitely! He looks so young in the clip you've chosen.

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  13. OOooo! A bit of a hot teaser there! Love it! It was the lips wot dun it!

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